What do you think of my writing (I’m 15)?

Tumbling out of bed with her ribbons in her birds nest hair and strawberry lipstick smudged from cheek to breast. Sunlight poured through the cotton veil that dressed her windows. Factories and apartments hidden behind goodwill interior. Coffee and cigarette hung in the air. Snooze was on the couch in an open kimono tap, tap, tapping his foot against the wood tiling and snapping his fingers to the spinning record. Booming drums and smooth saxophones spewing from the speakers. Her eyes rang up from his cherry feet to his bonsai cut like an elevator machine. Their eyes met and that smile escaped its cage. Something had to be done and like wild animals in a social life city at dawn they tore at each other. Pouncing and ripping their second coat off. Paint exploring the walls with each button undone. Stars falling from the ceiling and confetti shooting out of every pore. Nirvana held the two children to her breast and they danced in their amphetamine ecstasy.

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